27
Sep
09

Amazing Spider-Man 549 – script sample: Spidey vs. The Thunderbolts, plus: meet Dr. Ernest T. Wretched!

Hello, Honest Devotees, and welcome to my newest issue of the Old & Improved Spider-Man!

Yes, “old & improved” — this is the Spider-Man you know if you’re a comics fan: married to MJ, smart, funny, and always trying to beat the odds.

In short, current Spider-Man comics have had Spider-Man make a deal w/the devil to undo his marriage to MJ as well as simply delete the last 20 or so years of comics continuity (and it all seems pretty random). There’s really nothing wrong with any of that — it was the approach that is of issue. From a storytelling POV, it was a a poor plot contrivance which also made Peter Parker quite unheroic. So I’m writing these scripts to prove there was a better way!

I feel Marvel’s current Amazing Spidey book, while packed with action, is not as strong as it s/b. No offense meant to the hard-working writers of late, but the dialogue and stories are a bit juvenile…yes, even for a comic book about a guy in a spider suit who fights guys dressed in rhino suits and the like. And I’ve not seen Peter use his great intellect at all (I’ve made certain he’s used it in several of my previous issues).

Two more quick notes, readers:
1. I post my first drafts here. This means I will always come back and make changes — often minor, sometimes major.
2. A “scientist” character who appeared in my previous issues finally finds himself here. That is, his character finally took shape (you other writers know how this is) — so I’m proud to introduce to you my bizarre scientist known as Ernest T. Wretched. Fun stuff!

Hope you dig it!

Originally posted my old Blog in June 2008

AMAZING SPIDER-MAN issue 549

(part 3 of IT’S A JUNGLE IN HERE)

PAGE ONE
SPLASH:
ANGLE ON a paste-up of a Daily Bugle front page which reads:
SPIDER-MAN IN A WEB!

An image has Spidey holding-off the Thunderbolts…but just barely. He’s clearly surrounded.

JJ’s hand(s) and Robbie’s hand(s) are in the panel.

1/ J.J.J. (O.P.): THIS IS THE ONE!

2/ ROBBIE: I THINK WE AGREE, J.J.

TITLE & CREDITS:
IT’S A JUNGLE IN HERE – PART 3
STORY: K E I T H  P L A N I T
ARTIST:
COLOR:
LETTERS:
DEDICATED TO: Stan, Steve, Sam Rosen, Mickey Dimeo, Don Heck, Danny Fingeroth, & Marv Wolfman

PAGE TWO:

Panel (1)
Angle on Robbie & JJ

1/ ROBBIE: IT’S THE BEST WE’VE GOT SO FAR. BUT I STILL FEEL LIKE OUR ANGLE ON THIS STORY IS WRONG.

2/ J.J.J.: OH COME ON, ROBBIE! THIS IS THE ANGLE YOUR TEAM WANTS!

Panel (2)
3/ ROBBIE: YEAH, STERN AND ROSS HAVE A NICE HANDLE ON THE STORY. BUT—

4/ J.J.J.: WHAT?

5/ J.J.J.: …WHAT?! SPILL IT ALREADY!

Panel (3)
Close on Robbie. Serious.

6/ ROBBIE: IT FEELS…LIKE THE EXACT OPPOSITE OF WHAT WE’VE PROMISED M.J. AND PETER. IT FEELS LIKE—

Panel (4)
Close on J.J.J., miserable at the thought.

7/ J.J.J.: — LIKE THE OLD DAYS.

Panel (5)
J.J.J.’s wiped the paste-up board – knocking off the image and the words.

6/ J.J.J.:  !@S%K!

Panel (6)
Betty Brant is at the door, holding several manila envelopes.

7/ BETTY: SERIOUSLY, IF YOU TWO WOULD JUST LEARN HOW TO USE A COMPUTER, THIS WOULD GO MUCH MORE QUICKLY.

PAGE THREE
Panel (1)
Betty handing envelopes over to J.J.J. He’s already opening one.

1/ BETTY: PRINT-OUTS, LO-RES, OF ALL THE PHOTOS. I’D STILL LIKE A SHOT AT A SIDEBAR ON THIS, JONAH.

2/ J.J.J.: HM. TALK TO ROBBIE.

3/ ROBBIE: I DON’T SEE WHY NOT, BETTY. PITCH ME SOMETHING – THREE GOOD IDEAS. WE’LL GO WITH ONE.

Panel (2)
Betty exiting.

4/ BETTY: THANKS!

5/ J.J.J.: ROBBIE, WE STILL PLANNING THE SPREAD ACROSS TWO PAGES?

6/ ROBBIE: AS FAR AS I KNOW.

(3)
J.J.J.’s holding up a picture, smiling behind it (he’s peeking out from the side or above it perhaps?).

The image is of Spider-Man trouncing the The Thunderbolts (Venom is NOT present in the image). The Prowler and Spidey’s new guardian (for lack) the Watcher (intro’d in a previous ish) are both helping out. A blurry hand can be seen reaching for the lens in one corner of the picture.

7/ J.J.J.: HEADER: LIKE LIGHTNING, SPIDEY STRIKES!

PAGE FOUR:
(1)

Robbie’s flipping through the other pictures from Betty.

1/ ROBBIE: CUTE. BUT NO GOOD.

2/ J.J.J.: WHA–?

3/ ROBBIE: FINGERS, TOP LEFT.

(2)
J.J.J. looking at image. Robbie laying out pictures from envelope.

4/ J.J.J.: !@$! PARKER’S BEEN TAKING PICTURES FOR HOW MANY YEARS AND HE STILL CAN’T– OH, RIGHT.

5/ ROBBIE: *sigh* LET’S START AT THE BEGINNING…

(3) Larger panel.
Pictures splayed out…We can see several of these shots clearly. We’re starting to see more of the story of Spidey’s battle with The Thunderbolts.

Robbie’s got his finger on one photo: an awkward shot reiterating the last panel from last issue – Spidey struggling beneath rubble.

* LETTERER: CAN WE HAVE A FONT CHANGE ON THE CAPTIONS?*

5/ ROBBIE CAPTION: The story starts simple enough…Spider-Man’s saved the city from the Rhino.

6/ JONAH CAPTION: Rampaging Rhino.

7/ ROBBIE CAPTION: Right. Thunderbolts apprehend. Probably because two of them have tussled with Pe–  uh, Spider-Man, and the Avengers are out saving the world or some-such.

8/ ROBBIE CAPTION: But this shot. This is where the T-Bolts destroyed city property and seemingly tried to kill Spider-Man.

(4) [inset to (3)?]: Medium close on J.J.J. and Robbie

9/ J.J.J.: AND THIS TRAVESTY OF PHOTOJOURNALISM CAME FROM?

10/ ROBBIE 4: A MAN WITH A 4.5 MEGAPIXEL NIKON HE APPARENTLY GOT OFF EBAY ‘FOR A STEAL.’

11/ J.J.J.:  %!@! MOVING ON…

PAGE FIVE:
Panel 1 (photo):
SPIDEY RUSHING RHINO…

Robbie’s finger is pointing to a building in the photo.

1/ ROBBIE CAPTION: But let’s step back. Spidey took on Rhino…and, for some reason, was trying to get to that same building…

2/ J.J.J.: What was it about, you think?

(2)
We’re ON THE SCENE here! No photos – full Marvel style.
Nighttime: Watcher rushing two of May’s doctors out amidst falling rubble – he’s dropping his cell phone.

3/ ROBBIE CAPTION: Not a clue, Jonah…

4/ WATCHER: W-WHAT IS THAT SOUND? OUT!
5/ WATCHER (connected balloon): EVERYBODY OUT!!

(3)
Nighttime: The docs and Watcher are on the street now – building collapsing behind them (Do we see the Rhino in the BG, taking it down?)

May is being wheeled off by two of Watcher’s men – she has some kind of protective covering around her, and is still wired to the machinery giving intravenous meds and keeping track of her vitals.

6/ WATCHER: WE GOTTA GET OUTTA THE CITY! I NEED A CELL PHONE – NOW!

(4) Dusk (just before morning):
a Rescue Copter (Reference pic: http://www.designed4use.com/images/RescueCopter_J.jpg) is picking up May; the Docs are climbing in, with EMS-for-hire helping her in.

Maybe one Doctor in BG is seen hiding/exiting from under a bridge or something to indicate where they’ve been hiding all night.

7/ CAPTION: LATER. . .

8/ WATCHER (to pilot): WE’VE BEEN IN HIDING FOR FOUR HOURS. FOUR HOURS OF KEEPING THE LADY ALIVE IN BAD CONDITIONS.

9/ WATCHER: YOU TAKE THIS LONG AGAIN, YOU AN’ ME, WE’RE GONNA HAVE PROBLEMS. TU ME ENTIENDE?

(5) Watcher’s rushing back toward Spidey…

10/ WATCHER: NOW GO, GO, GO!!

(6) (Photo):
Shot of Watcher joining Spidey and Prowler…

PAGE SIX:
ARTIST NOTE: More or less, this is the old-fashioned Marvel layout of six even panels – only each panel is a photo. And the photos might be two printouts forming one picture…pictures taken from phones w/time stamps… poorly aimed shots taken from a window, etc.
ARTIST NOTE 2: These images, figure-wise (as opposed to layout), shouldn’t be quite as dynamic as your usual Marvel panels (to help differentiate the “photos” from the ON-THE-SCENE action)…

Panel (1) (photo):
Spider-Man in the clutches of Venom.

1/ ROBBIE CAPTION: Venom’s clearly got a vendetta…

(2) (photo):
Spidey, unnoticed by Venom, is shooting a web at Penance.

(3) (photo):
Spidey’s yanked the web, and Penance is coming at Venom from behind – Venom doesn’t notice.

(4) (photo):
Venom’s spun around as Penance is about to crash into him.

2/ J.J.J. CAPTION: I tell ya, Robbie. Parker makes each one of these battles of his look like a Marx Brothers movie…like he doesn’t take it seriously at all. How can he be so glib?

(5) (photo):
Spidey escapes as both Thunderbolts tumble – Songbird is on Spidey’s tail in the shot.

(6) (photo):
The other TBolts go after Spidey.

3/ ROBBIE CAPTION: Jonah. It’s Pete just trying to avoid the big issues.

PAGE SEVEN:
The photos have improved on this page – the pics are taken from Pete’s camera as illustrated in the first panel:

Panel 1 (photo):
Webbed lens flying backward through air; action in BG of the fight.

1/ ROBBIE CAPTION: Alright, Pete got himself together here…took a breather, got his own camera set up…

(2) (photo):
Spider-Man is not running from the TBolts here, he’s turned: tackling Swordsman, webbing both Moonstone and Radioactive man.

A little bit of webbing should be floating at the corner of the shot – a remainder from the previous shot.

(3) (photo):
Spidey’s taken out Swordsman.

(4) (photo):
2/ ROBBIE CAPTION: This shocked the guys in the news 8 copter, until they all realized what he was up to…

Spidey’s gone right up to Songbird – he’s punching her right across the jaw! (Venom in the BG?)

(5) (photo):
Spidey on the run from a clearly angry Songbird – sound constructs (spikes?) shooting toward Spidey!

(* Artist Question: would the sound constructs be visible to a camera? That is, they’re visible in the POV from the practicality for a depiction of them to the reader [just like an outline of Sue Richards when invisible], but would they be actually visible to a camera? If not, we can ripple areas of the picture to indicate there are spikes flying past, and I’ll add a caption from Robbie).

(6) (photo):
Spidey has taken a sudden sharp turn toward Venom…

PAGE EIGHT:
Panel 1 (photo):
Spidey’s jumped out of the way, as the sound spikes strike Venom, the symbiote/”costume” is rippling, like sound waves are shooting through it.

(2) (photo):
Venom symbiote is reacting wildly in this shot to the songbird power, removing itself from Gargan…. as Spidey has reached for something in nearby rubble.

(3) (photo):
Spidey holding a water tower (the kind which used to sit atop the building which is now rubble), which he grabbed from the rubble, over his head…

(4) (photo):
Spidey’s got a web shield up, blocking an attack by Penance; with his other hand, he has slammed down the water tower, covering the symbiote  – Gargan can be seen curled-up nearby.

(5) (photo):
Spidey’s swung the tower off into the air with a web line which he’s released in this shot. Little strings of symbiote are coming out of the top (of which is sealed with webbing should it be visible)

(6) (photo):
Remaining TBolts attack at once…
As Gargan runs for cover…

PAGE NINE:
Panel 1 (Photo):
Closer on Gargan falling down the pile of rubble…

1/ ROBBIE (CAPTION): So Spider-Man took out his worst enemy first…but he somehow came back…and was the reason for what happened to Spider-Man — to Pete — later on.

(2) ON THE SCENE [we’re now in full Marvel style, not camera POV]:
Gargan finishes falling, collapses – he’s naked, sans symbiote… (ARTIST: In BG, do we see Spidey fighting TBolts as in Photo 6 on previous page?)

(3)
Same as (2), only someone is dragging Gargan’s body behind/around the corner he’s landed near….

(4)
Larger panel here.

In foreground is the scientist we’ve seen before. His name by the way is ERNEST T. WRETCHED (because, you know, why the F$!% not?).

A technologically advanced GGI corporation truck is behind Dr. Wretched. A couple of GGI guys are preparing something on the truck, a portion of which is opening….

2/ WRETCHED 1: PLEASE, SIR, PLEASE, SIR, MR. GARGAN, SIR, WON’T YOU GET INTO MY TRUCK, SIR?

3/ GARGAN: *OHHNNN…*

4/ WRETCHED: HEHHEH. YES. YOU WILL BE JUST FINE. JUST PEFECTLY A-O-FINE!

PAGE TEN:
Panel 1 (photo):
A caped figure has jumped into frame, in foreground.

(2) (photo):
We now see it’s The Prowler…

1/ ROBBIE CAPTION: Be nice to be the cockroach on the wall here and get an earful…

(3)
Larger panel. We’re ON THE SCENE here…this shot could be just a moment after the above picture.

2/ SPIDER-MAN: PROWLER! YOU’RE A SIGHT FOR SORE EYES…AND FOR A SORE HEAD…A SORE TIBIA…A SORE PINKIE TOE…

3/ PROWLER: I’D’VE GOTTEN HERE SOONER, BUT I WAS BUSY CLEANING UP THE CITY!

4/ SPIDER-MAN: DON’T FORGET 58TH STREET – I ACCIDENTALLY DROPPED A PENNY THERE THE OTHER DAY!

5/ PROWLER: I PICKED IT UP. AND GOT GOOD LUCK!

(4) (photo):
Prowler and Spidey holding their own against remaining TBolts.

(5) (photo):
Prowler and Spidey losing ground…Watcher coming up in BG?

PAGE ELEVEN:
Panel 1 (PHOTO):
Watcher, Prowler, and Spidey fighting Thunderbolts!

1/ J.J.J. CAPTION: So Spider-Man and his spectacular pals – one of whom nobody knows — go on the offensive. They beat back the Bolts—

2/ ROBBIE CAPTION: Thunderbolts.

3/ J.J.J. CAPTION: Don’t care. They beat them back — for a while…but how the heck did Pete’s camera get back here?

(2) ON THE SCENE:
MJ’s in the news room of the Bugle, using a phone in someone’s cubicle…

In BG, we see the Spidey, Watcher, and Prowler fighting the T-Bolts on TV.

4/ MJ: I KNOW, FLASH…YES. WELL, SINCE LONG BEFORE WE WERE MARRIED.

5/ MJ: BUT, LISTEN, I NEED TO ASK YOU SOMETHING… YOU STILL THE FASTEST QUARTERBACK EMPIRE STATE UNIVERSITY’S EVER SEEN?

(3)
Angle on Flash in his apt. – he’s looking as he did last ish: wearing sweats, being lazy in front of the t.v., etc. He’s got the same channel on his TV the newsroom was turned to.

6/ FLASH (lying): YOU BET!

7/ FLASH 2: …UH-HUH….OK. MJ, I DUNNO IF– OH. WELL, HECK, WHY NOT, “FLASH” SOUNDS LIKE A SUPERHERO NAME, MIGHT AS WELL LIVE UP TO IT! I’LL DO IT, MJ!

(4)
Smaller panel. Close on Flash, depressed, phone hung up.

8/ FLASH: FUDGE ON A STICK.

(5)
Flash running down a city street.

(6)
Flash running past Prowler and a T-Bolt fighting – frightened look on his face…

PAGE TWELVE:
ON THE SCENE:
Panels 1-3:
Flash, scared, avoiding flying debris and such, he’s right in the middle of the fray. (And sweating profusely — this isn’t as easy as in the old days.)

(4)
Spidey sparring with Radioactive Man, Flash in back, grabbing camera…

1/ SPIDER-MAN (thought): WHAT THE HECK IS FLA— AH! THE MORNING EDITION. COUNT ON JONAH TO HAVE HIS PRIORITIES STRAIGHT!

(5)
Flash is running with the camera – he passes Penance who, for the fun of it, shoots bolts his way –

(6) (camera phone photo):
Flash flying through the air…

2/ J.J.J. CAPTION: And no one’s heard from him?

3/ ROBBIE CAPTION: No one’s heard from him, but the next picture is the last one on the card.

PAGE THIRTEEN:
Panel 1 (photo):
Worm’s Eye view from the camera’s POV: a little boy hesitantly taking the camera

(2) ON THE SCENE:
Flash has had the wind knocked out of ‘im.

He’s trying to pull himself up in the shot, handing the kid the camera (the way he’s holding the camera is the shot seen in panel 1 [perhaps camera’s even upside down?]).

1/ FLASH: HEY, KIDDO…YOU KNOW THE…DAILY BUGLE BUILDING.

2/ KID: YOU WORK FOR THAT RAG?

3/ FLASH: HEH.

(3)

4/ FLASH: JUST GET THE…CAMERA THERE FOR ME, WOULDJA?

5/ KID  WHAT THE H$%& I GET IN RETURN?

6/ FLASH: I’M FRIENDS WITH SPIDEY. I’LL GET YOU AN AUTOGRAPH.

7/ KID: OK. I’LL WAIT.
(4)
Flash eyes the kid.

(5)
Kid takes the camera, worn down by Flash

8/ KID 3: FIIIIIIIINE!

(6)
Kid’s running off (or is he on a skateboard or a scooter of some kind?), Flash hears something O.P.

9/ FLASH: HM?…

PAGE FOURTEEN:
Panel 1:
Flash, still a bit banged-up, is leaning against a wall, looking around a corner…

1/ FLASH: WHAT THE–?!

(2)
Larger panel.

The Rhino is being loaded into the GGI truck we saw earlier – the one Mac Gargan was put into by the scientist…

2/ WRETCHED: IT’S OKAY, ALEKSEI, YOU’RE SAFE NOW. WE’VE UNBROKEN YOU. ALL WILL BE WELL…

3/ WRETCHED: …EVERYTHING’S WORKING OUT VERY, VERY WELL INDEED…

(3)
Wretched on his cell phone.

4/ WRETCHED: OH, GENTLEST MEN? HAVE YOU FOUND THAT WEE PACKAGE I ASKED YOU TO LOCATE?

(4)
CUT TO: near the Hudson river…

A van — driven by one GGI GUY – has a winch attached to somethign in the water and is pulling something out of said water.

GGI Guy #2 is standing outside the van waving the driver to keep pulling the item out….

SFX (at straining tires): SCREEEEEEEE!

5/ GGI GUY 1 (ON PHONE): SI, DOC-TOR ERNEST. WE ALMOST GOT IT.

(5)
We see now it’s the water tower Spidey threw into the Hudson…

The symbiote is working hard to burst free!

PAGE FIFTEEN:
Panel 1:
Angle on Doc Wretched ..:

1/ WRETCHED: SO GOOD. SO, SO GOOD. YES. GET IT HERE AS QUICKLY AS YOU—

(2)
There’s a shadow over him – he’s looking up at it nervously—

2/ WRETCHED: *

(3)
It’s the symbiote – large and hovering over the Doc.

(4)
Larger panel(?): The symbiote drops the GGI guys out of its “body,” as well as the van and remnants of the water tower.

Doc Wretched is jumping out of the way…

(5)
Small panel, or an inset to (6)…

Wretched is dialing another number with his thumb….

(6)
Wretched talking into phone:

3/ WRETCHED 1: SIR. DOCTOR ERNEST T. WRETCHED. RHINO IS SAFE. TARGET TWO WILL BE HERE IN MOMENTS…AND WE’LL HAVE TARGET THREE IN THE HOUR…

PAGE SIXTEEN:
Panel 1:
Wretched has spun around, and is facing the Venom symbiote.

4/ WRETCHED: I KNOW. I KNOW YOU WANT GARGAN BACK—

5/ WRETCHED: … WE’VE GOT HIM…

(2)
The truck where Rhino was loaded into, has opened another section, revealing Gargan – captured in an air-tight container.

* NOTE: It’d be great if we could again see Flash in the BG (or extreme foreground?) here.

6/ WRETCHED: SMARTLY KEEP YOUR PATIENCE, CREATURE! HE HAS BUT MINUTES OF AIR. I PROMISE, WHEN WE’RE DONE WITH HIM…

(3)
Close on Wretched, evil. The symbiote pulling him up.

7/ WRETCHED: …THERE WILL BE NO FOREIGN ELEMENTS IN HIM — YOURS SHALL SO CERTAINLY BE THE DOMINANT LIFE FORCE!

(4)
The symbiote has dropped Dr. Wretched and is moving itself to rest upon the cylindrical prison which holds Gargan…

(5)
Flash is close by, and has seen all of this of course.

8/ FLASH: THIS IS SOME SERIOUS SH–!

9/ WRETCHED (O.P.): YOU!

(6)
The GGI truck is closing, symbiote, Gargan, and Rhino packed away nicely…

10/ FLASH: I- I HAVEN’T DONE—

11/ WRETCHED: NO, NO, PAINED YOUNG MAN. ‘TIS NOT WHAT YOU’VE SEEN. YOU ARE HURT–

12/ WRETCHED: –COME. ALLOW ME TO HELP PLEASE…ALL WILL WORK OUT VERY, VERY WELL INDEED!

PAGE SEVENTEEN:
Panel 1:
TV screen. GGI logo in BG of shot on TV. A man, seen last ish (the PR GUY), is at a podium, several mics in front of him; the shape-shifting Legal Guy from last ish is nearby as well.

1/ PR GUY (electric balloon, from TV) : …FULLY ADMIT WE ARE RESPONSIBLE FOR THE DAMAGE TO THE ABANDONED CITY PROPERTY BY THE HUDSON RIVER…NOT ONLY WILL WE REIMBURSE THE CITY…

(2)
We’re in the Daily Bugle news room. We see the staff looking up at the TV, MJ is dead center…

2/ PR GUY (electric balloon, from TV) : …BUT OUR LEGAL REPRESENTATIVE – TO MY RIGHT – HAS ALREADY BEEN IN TOUCH WITH MR. OSBORN, HEAD OF THE THUNDERBOLTS AND FORMER GREEN GOBLIN [note: only of this was public knowledge this point])…

3/ PR GUY (electric balloon, from TV) : .WE HAVE PROMISED TO COVER THE COSTS OF THE BUILDING HIS PEOPLE DESTROYED, AND WE IN TURN RECEIVED HIS SIGN-OFF TO FURTHER ASSIST…

(3)
We’re looking at MJ now…

4/ MJ (thought) : GREAT. SO THESE NUTS RELEASE RHINO OUT INTO THE CITY, THEY GET A FREE PASS. PETER MAKES A FEW MISTAKES AFTER SAVING THE CITY THOUSANDS OF TIMES, AND WE’RE STILL ON THE RUN.

5/ MJ (thought) : LIFE’S SO FAIR…HMPH!

(4)

Back to shot of PR Guy (doesn’t have to be on the TV):

6/ PR GUY: … THE SITUATION WAS ALSO DISCUSSED WITH THE CITY’S MAYOR, AND, IN HIS WORDS, AS LONG AS WE’VE GOT THE THUNDERBOLTS’ APPROVAL, WE’VE GOT HIS…

(5)
7/ PR GUY: …AS SUCH, WE ANTICIPATE THIS FIGHT TO END SOON…AND IT IS OUR VOW THAT SPIDER-MAN WILL BE APPREHENDED!


PAGE EIGHTEEN:

Panel 1:
Close on Gargan, screaming!

1/ CAPTION: AT THAT MOMENT. . .

2/ GARGAN: AAAIIGHHH!!

(2)
We’re in the same lab as Rhino was in last ish. It’s the same setup…only the Venom symbiote hovers impatiently above.

3/ WRETCHED: YE-E-ES…YES, MAX! FEEL THE RELEASE! FEEL IT!

(3)
Wretched to the symbiote…

4/ WRETCHED: JUST…UNDERSTAND THE VIRTUE OF PATIENCE…YES…IT WILL BE SO PLEASING…SO, SO PLEASING, YOU WILL BE EMPOWERED, CREATURE! EMPOWERED!

(4)
Wretched is lowering a dial of some sort…Gargan looks as crazed as the Rhino did in the previous issue…

5/ GARGAN: GYAAH! * HUFF – HUFF – HUFF! *

6/ WRETCHED: ALL RIGHT, OKAY…

(5)
Shot of the symbiote attaching itself to the mad Mac Gargan!

7/ WRETCHED: ALL YOURS, YOU ANIMALISTIC, DARK THING!

(6)
Venom exits in a tizzy, through the hole in the wall created by Rhino previously…

8/ WRETCHED (small): IT’S ALL SO MARVELOUS!

PAGE NINETEEN – TWENTY:
*ARTIST: layout pages as you see fit/combine panels or condense action as nec., to give some focus to Venom at end of description.

Here are the high points:

Watcher is taken down by Swordsman!
(Can Spidey be in background bringing more rubble down on Radioactive man?)

Prowler is taken down by Penance!
(Can Spidey be in background swinging something large into Radioactive man?)

Spider-Man is knocked into Songbird by Radioactive Man busting out of whatever shielding Spidey tossed on him in BG above.

Songbird’s about to knock Spidey out, but a giant spike swings across her face, shattering one of her sound constructs and knocking her down…

Having taken out Songbird with his wrist spikes, Spidey is now jumping at Radioactive Man with those crazy spider-spikes still sticking out from his wrists.

1/ SPIDER-MAN (THOUGHT): OKAY, SO, ACTUALLY BEING PART SPIDER AIN’T SUCH A BAD DEAL!

An action shot of Spidey hopping all over Radioactive Man, poking holes in his suit…

He webs RM’s feet, and he spins, tossing RM out into the Hudson!

But with Spidey looking victorious, an enraged Venom enters, looking extremely powerful, but not ridiculously over-grown as is often seen.

He knocks Spidey around a bit. Last panel should be a menacing shot with Venom clearly winning out…

PAGE TWENTY-ONE:
This is a shot of a Double-Page spread inside the Daily Bugle newspaper — so it looks like an open newspaper:

Three B&W Photos telling the story of the battles of this and last issue…
(*ARTIST NOTE: middle image of Spidey should be a shot of him with the spikes coming out of his wrist)

HEADLINE: RHINO vs. SPIDEY vs. THUNDERBOLTS!
By The Daily Bugle Staff
The Text of the article:
MANHATTAN – Fugitive of the Superhuman Registration Act, the amazing Spider-Man, today battled the fierce villain known as The Rampaging Rhino. But just as the dust cleared, S.H.I.E.L.D.’s lead team of The Initiative, The Thunderbolts, bolted onto the scene.
At the tail-end of the battle, Spider-Man revealed a “power” previously unseen by the public-at-large. Specifically, some sort of spikes popped from the hero’s wrists. Superhuman expert Dr. Leonard Samson surmises this may be “an outward display of the spider-being raging inside him.” While Dr. Samson is no expert of the animal kingdom, it seems Spider-Man’s strength and abilities have indeed gone through changes over the last couple of years.
The battle began yesterday evening, as The Rhino, seemingly frantic, randomly tore down an abandoned building with his powerful frame and continued to destroy city property. Local company GGI has taken responsibility for this, although it seems Spider-Man (ADD “GREEK TEXT” AFTER THIS)

Sidebar:
Little Boy Delivers to the ‘Bugle’
By Betty Brant
The text of the article:
Today, a young boy named Tieg showed up at The Daily Bugle offices with a camera and a tale normally left for the comic books you buy at your locals newsstand. Tieg was running errands for his mother when he came across, in his own words, “a guy who said he was Spider-Man’s ‘bff.'” At first uncertain, Tieg soon believed the “man with orange hair” was “for real” and ran here to the Bugle offices as fast as his feet could carry him.
(ADD “GREEK TEXT” AFTER THIS)

NOTE: SMALL IMAGE of the LITTLE BOY Flash gave the camera to should accompany article.

1/ ROBBIE (O.P.): WE’RE BACK WHERE WE STARTED.  I KNOW IT’S THE STRONGEST LEAD WE’VE GOT, BUT

2/ J.J.J. (O.P.): NO, ‘BUTS,’ ROBBIE. WE’VE A PAPER TO RUN. AND WE NEED A HOOK ON PAGE ONE. SO LET’S JUST FACE IT–

PAGE TWENTY-TWO:
* ARTIST NOTE: Robbie and Jonah are flanking the shot of the Bugle, both looking dismal, defeated.

3/ J.J.J.: –THIS IS THE BIG STORY.

4/ ROBBIE (small): YEAH. . .

ANGLE ON PAGE 1 OF THE DAILY BUGLE (Jonah can be holding the paper, or we can see his cigar in the frame [b/c in MY world, he still smokes, damn it!], or any other way you want to indicate Jonah nearby)

HEADLINE: SPIDER-MAN CAPTURED BY T-BOLTS
SUB-HEAD: Local Co. promises “We’ll take the ‘Spider’ Out of Spider-Man!”

IMAGE: Let’s see a somewhat pixilated b&w shot – CLOSE-UP – of Spidey.

He should look fierce: the spikes are coming out of both wrists, maybe one wrist shooting webbing…he’s clearly in the heat of battle!
(Is there a partial time-stamp cropped out of the corner of the image to recall the images from the start of the story?)

CAPTION:

NEXT: SPIDER-MAN IS CAUGHT! SPIDER-MAN IS TORTURED! SPIDER-MAN IS DEFEATED!

IS THIS THE END OF OUR WEBBED WONDER?!

Find out in IT’S A JUNGLE IN HERE PART 4!

All characters TM and Copyright Marvel Enterprises
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